Would you reply to this message if you were searching for PR assistance? Why or why not? Critiques welcome?
April 21st, 2010 | by admin |Hi,
(Company Name) is precisely the right firm to launch your campaign to the next level via an amazing press release and killer PR. We have extensive experience across multiple industry placements We also have experience obtaining product placements/ reviews, and B2B awareness for professionals services, celebrities and more. Obtaining coverage in newspapers, print magazines and throughout broadcast media as well. We are easily able to obtain product reviews by top bloggers and popular new product and review editors.
We plan your entire campaign, distribute and achieve immediate placements in publications such as the LA Times, PC World, USA Today, and the Village Voice, and Popular magazines to name a few.
Our standard monthly retainers range from ( retainer rates). We do only take on 12 clients at a time and currently have 2 slots open. Our industry expertise ranges from Beauty and Fashion, Travel, Web 2.0 clients, Consumer Products and media product placements, technology, iphone hardware and software, events, B2B consulting and more. Please do let me know if our services are within your price range for a killer PR campaign. I am flexible and would very much love to work with you.
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I think it sounds pretty good however I don’t see the need to include:
" Our standard monthly retainers range from ( retainer rates). We do only take on 12 clients at a time and currently have 2 slots open."
I feel those two things can be left to discuss between you and the client in person.
On another note do you have any entry level positions available? I’m a recent graduate and my major was public relations I figure it can’t hurt to ask in this economy.
3 Responses to “Would you reply to this message if you were searching for PR assistance? Why or why not? Critiques welcome?”
By randy e on Apr 22, 2010 | Reply
Do you walk on water too? lol. It’s a nice letter. But in an email, it takes too long to read. Especially, if I am in a hurry. If you are just going to do email, use bullet points to show what problems you can fix and what serivices you provide. Loose the part about 12 customers and you have 2 slots left. (It looks like you work alone).
If you wanted to take a different approach make up a brochure in PDF format that can be printer.
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By Restless on Apr 22, 2010 | Reply
I think it sounds pretty good however I don’t see the need to include:
" Our standard monthly retainers range from ( retainer rates). We do only take on 12 clients at a time and currently have 2 slots open."
I feel those two things can be left to discuss between you and the client in person.
On another note do you have any entry level positions available? I’m a recent graduate and my major was public relations I figure it can’t hurt to ask in this economy.
References :
By Doctor J on Apr 22, 2010 | Reply
Your letter is all about "we", "we", "we". You need to focus on the customer. Your letter needs to be all about "you", "you", "you".
Frankly, if you had the experience your letter claims, you would know how to market yourself – and how to focus on the customer’s needs.
Best wishes and good luck.
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